Writing Towards a Thesis exercise

In some of my sources that I had used in my annotated bibliography, my topic has developed quite well since I have been working on my final research essay. For starters, I had a completely different topic then what I have currently. My topic previously was that divorced parents lead to a increase in underage pregnancies. What I found through some of the research was that there were not that many sources that had explained that divorced parents did not lead to the increase in underage pregnancies. What I had wanted was a source that did not agree with my my other sources but it was difficult to find. The sources that had come up as well were sources that did not give me a whole lot of information regarding the influence of divorced parents and teen pregnancy but rather just divorce or just teen pregnancy. Now my topic is that working mothers have both a positive and negative influence on academic achievement in children and in adolescence. I argue that there should be more academic after school programs that help students with working mothers achieve higher academic achievement. What I had discovered was that working mothers can play as a role model and children especially girls who have working mothers have slightly higher test and IQ scores then other students their age. I also found that there was in decrease in academic achievement in both children and adolescence. What I think then and now are almost completely the same. I knew before hand that there had to be some positives and negatives of working mothers and their children's academic achievement.

For the past couple decades, there have been ongoing debates with mothers who have children who work in paid employment. One of the many hot debates that is still going on today is the affect of working mothers on their child’s academic achievement. For many years researchers have been studying the correlation between a working mother and their child’s academic achievement. Studies range from elementary school to teen adolescence. Sources that I have found not only include studies of all ages but state that working mothers have both a positive and negative influence on a child’s academic achievement. In conclusion to my research I believe that there should be more after school academic programs that help children whose mothers are in the workforce achieve higher academic achievement. In my research paper I will not only discuss the relationship that working mothers and the affect of their academic achievement have together but I will also propose a solution that may help children who have a decrease in their academic achievement because their mothers are in the workforce.


If someone were to say "so what" I would respond by saying that this is important because there is a continuous pattern that proves that children are having decreased academic achievement because of thier mothers in the workforce. I would also say that this might be a deciding factor if you decide you don't or do want to be the breadwinner of the family and have your wife stay home and help the child if needed. This of course would be intended towards a guy.